Fantasy Update 2

Progress, progress.  Now up through page 109 on the revision.  And I think I’ve gotten rid of all (or most I hope) of the real errors along with grammar improvements, and more readable text.  Thinking of “readable” text, you might wonder what that is.  For me, the text should bring up mental pictures in the readers mind, like the best painting only using words to entice the reader’s brain to paint the picture.  Maybe some of you will tell me how I did once this gets published.